I did not think that my feedback was so important to you. I mean i tried making literature for star fox, and it was terrible, even i admit it. However you have real talent here. Probably the reason for why i stopped is because I had a lot of trouble putting my ideas into engaging literature. Also it seems that my storyline does not mix well with the canon, which is what i wanted it to flow with. i will definitely try to comment more on your works, give you more advice if i can, although i do not know what good it will really do you, i can't draw much either. I have also noticed that you have a lot more confidence in your work, I like that. Keep it up, your story is very interesting and the not so large group that watch your work definitely want to see more, I do at least.
If you have skype, teamspeak, ventrilo, Dolby Axon, or any other method of communication, you can find me there and we can chat/talk if you want.